This is very very good. I could explain at great length why the obvious shopping doesn't detract, but I'm not going to. I'll just say that this would be good without trying to convince the viewer that it was found in a "little golden book" or whatever. I for one welcome our new alien overlords.
OK here's a question: I'm no Star Trek buff, but I'd bet there is at least 1 episode that mentions our solar system's planets (thus naming Pluto incorrectly). Am I right?
You're message may be alright for all I know, but you speak too slowly. Maybe you should write down what you want to say beforehand. Planning ahead never hurts.
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