Two guys playing dodgeball?
Asside from that, I'm at a loss. Perhaps if I were to give an alteration I'd say "change the title... make it descriptive of what the hell is going on there."
Nice batman-esque pun.... well, not that original, but it works here. Low-rider, I suppose it works with the image. However, the image and sound still don't work together as one. I dunno... are you gonna work form the batman or lowrider angle?
Also, you should extend the time on each one of the shots by like a minute or so. I was having a hard time finishing reading before *poof* it was gone.
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